[HQ Ignorance] A little help with Donalari, please

[Sam Elliot]

What I would suggest is to remember it is an iterative process. Take your narrative and underline what you think becomes abilties. Then look at the bits without underlining and rewrite those. The long bits of underlining you may want to shorten. I tend to find I can get 20 or more abilities out of a narrative, which is a form of min-maxing. (In my defence, I usually fall short of 100 words.) Here´s an example in case it helps. If you look at it I think you´ll see an ability every few words.
   
  I´m not suggesting you do it like that, but this might help with the process?
   
  If you want to repost your narrative I might be able to have a stab at tightening it up (if you want) or ripping abilities out.
   
  Sam.
   
  “Every_fish_has_a_tale*”, Errol waxes_ lyrical his tales_of_the_Solthi_River, eyes_a-glint, mustachios_a-twirl. Of Jondaling stock, the romantic fisherman is a pillar_of_the_community, tending the shrine to St._Poverl_the_Provider in the Jansholm_cathedral, swapping_gossip_even_with_nobles. His daughters man the market_stall and he delivers, the fish_oils selling well for lamps and salves. His inks are the_best_in_town but his line_in_isinglas stalled with a blind_brewer**. His boon companion, Glendar_the_carpenter, constructed Many_Splendours and together they hauled the Siren up in Annilla’s_Net. Firm of jaw and conviction, Errol knows what_is_right. He  sees the_good_ in_others but rarely the bad and despairs of finding matches for his daughters.
  

"Andrew J. Weill" <aweill at ix.netcom.com> wrote:
  I'm still fumbling my way through the transition between the writeup and
skills/abilities. Could Lev or someone else help me on this?



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